Blog # 5

1. What aspect of the American Icons artist statement has been most successful for you? Why?
I would say that my intro is really powerful and get to the shocking point. Already having a great start help me write the rest of the artist statement. I say this because I feel that if have a great Idea from the start the rest will come naturally.
2. What writing tip(s) have been the most helpful? Why?
A writing tip that has been helpful I would say the loop one it help me create a loop so that my reader would be interested finish reading instead of starting it and skip it.

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3. What aspect of the artist statement has been most challenging? Why?
I would say an aspect I had trouble with is was trying to make my writing strong but also making sure that my writing is understandable by other readers that know me. I had this challenge because I already knew my story and everything so I had make sure that I was detail so the reader could understand my view.
4. What writing tip is most challenging? Why?
A tip I had trouble with was concerts not pancakes I had trouble getting my writing to be like a concert start awesome and end awesome.

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5. Post a section of your writing that you are currently working on. List at least three questions that, if answered, would help you improve your work.
It was a normal day after school. I had just got home and was putting my stuff away. Out of nowhere I hear my mom say to me, “Come over here and sit down with me, I have some news to tell you”. And then she said it. “I have a brain tumor. I want you to be able to take care of yourself as much as you can and we will get through this”. After she told me that I didn’t know what to think. I didn’t know how to react. As she watched my blank face she made some joke to me cheer me up. Till this day I don’t know what that joke was. I still remember that blank feeling.
It was a normal day after school. I had just got home and was putting my stuff away. Out of nowhere I hear my mom say to me, “Come over here and sit down with me, I have some news to tell you”. And then she said it. “I have a brain tumor. I want you to be able to take care of yourself as much as you can and we will get through this”. After she told me that I didn’t know what to think. I didn’t know how to react. As she watched my blank face she made some joke to me cheer me up. Till this day I don’t know what that joke was. I still remember that blank feeling.
Does my opening connect well?
How should I improve the writing? So the writing can be strong and capture the reader’s attention.
Should there be more detailed?